Let me read it to you
sitting
quietly
in a corner
sobbing
tears flowing
down her cheeks
alone
mind searching
for a reason
confused
wondering
why did he leave
suddenly
joy
happiness
now all gone
crying
trembling
curled in a ball
inconsolable
others
ignore her
it’s like
she’s
invisible
1 comment:
The descending note of this piece effectively set the mood, and I was gasping for air when I reached the end.
Such a moving 'lil poem, Keith.
The economy of words used in each line, expressed the emotions in such a minimal way, yet achieve volumes of blow in the heart.
Thank you for being part of my writing life in 2008, Keith. I was less active towards the end of the year but I'm now preparing a come back for the dawning 2009.
May your year ahead would be as fruitful and would spring more blessings.
Seize 2009!
I wish you well.
~ Jeques
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